[Josh]

Poetry is not realy my thing so this is my first real attempt at it. I know it’s not very good but I would appreciate ideas on how to make it better.

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Silent Tears

I hurt so badly
Deep down in my soul
My privet pain going untold
No one to help me
No one to hold me
So I cry silent tears

They fall heavy like stones
I cry them quietly
I cry them alone
So no one judges my pain
So no one judges me

Years of agony rush out
In my silent tears
Like a boiling torrent
That no one hears

I can't live
It hurts too much
I can't die
I’m all ready dead
So all I can do is cry
Silent tears

 

[glittergaze]

Josh, it's a very good poem.

 

[Noca]

Sounds good

 

[Josh]

Thanks :blush

 

[AWholeNewMe]

lol, that made me feel sad...

Great poem though.

 

[Noca]

privet = private

all ready = already

besides that its perfect